My Goals
Goal 1 : Learn
another language.
Goal 2 : Get high
GPA.
Goal 3 : Visit Korea
with my family.
Conclusion : In conclusion, I have to set the goals
for myself. It might be difficult for me but as I said hard work brings success
. I will concentrate on that goals and pray to the God . "길고 짧은 것은 대어 보아야 안다" you Wil never
know until you try.
Do you ever write your goals in letter ?
Everyone must have their goals. I am writing this letter to myself with three
goals in it . I will open this letter 4 years after graduated and decide
whether I have achieved these goals . The goals I have set for myself are to
learn another language, to get high GPA and to visit Korea with my family. Now,
I will explain why I chose these goals and how I plan to accomplish them.
First, I want to learn another language . Now not only English is important but if you can, you have to learn another language . For example Korean, Mandarin, and Japanese. Because learn many language give you many benefits like meet new people, easy to get job, and it's good for traveling. So this year I plan to learn Korean and Mandarin. I will learn Korean from YouTube and watch Korean variety show and reality show . And for Mandarin I will ask my Chinese friend to teach me .
Next, I plan to get high GPA . My parents will more proud if I get high GPA . I will make schedule for my study, ask some questions and study together with my friends who smarter than me . More diligent and submit my assignment on time .
Finally, my plan to visit Korea . I already made a promise with my family to visit Korea. To achieve this goal after graduated I will find a good job and saving the money to buy the tickets . In Korea, I just want to know about Korea, is Korea as beautiful as I had watch in YouTube ? And I want to try their traditional food in the night market . I will work hard to achieve this goal . There is Korean idiom said "고생 끝에 낙이 온다" it means at the end of hard ship comes happiness or hard work brings success .
In conclusion, I have to set the goals for myself. It might be difficult for me but as I said hard work brings success . I will concentrate on that goals and pray to the God . "길고 짧은 것은 대어 보아야 안다" you Wil never know until you try.
Hi Krisna...
ReplyDeleteit's a nice paragraph about your personal goal. I hope that you can accomplish your personal goal within 4 years. Overall, I think your article is good.
Maybe you should recheck in paragraph 2. Should be 'Because learn many languages give you many benefits like meet new people, east to get the job, and it's good for traveling".
and in paragraph 1. Should be "Do you ever write your goals in the letter?
thank you
Hello Krisna
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing goals
I very interesting with all of your goals
You have a good structure also
By the way, I think there are some mistakes on your article
For example, "The goals I have set for myself are to learn another language, to get high GPA and to visit Korea with my family."
May I suggest you to delete some words like "to". So, it will become :
"The goals I have set for myself are to learn another language, get good GPA (Grade Point Average) and visit South Korea wiThe goals I have set for myself are to learn another language, to get high GPA and to visit Korea with my family.th my family)
Also, don't forget to put some supporting points for each paragraph like statistics, examples, or quotation
That is all and I think your grammar is improved day by day
Keep writing :)
Hi krisna good article.go to Korea also is my goal .your article is easy to understand!fighting
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ReplyDeleteIt's a good article. Your vocabulary and structure also. I think, you've already improved. I like your way to describe the idea from each paragraph. I hope too you can fulfill your own goals within 4 years in here. by the way, I just wanna give a little suggestion. My suggestion is, would be better if you change sentence on the last paragraph like "In conclusion, I have to set the goals for myself. It might be difficult for me but as I said hard work brings success ." supposed to be "In conclusion, I have set the three goals for myself. It might be difficult for me but as I said hard work brings success ." That's all from me
Thank You
Hi Krisna
ReplyDeleteThat's a good article and I can easily understand it. You connect your paragraph very well. Your vocabulary is very variety but I think you need to recheck your grammar structure. You need to change this sentence " learn many language" to be " learn many languages" and you need to recheck about using "space" in your article. I think your writing skill improve be better.
Thank you
Dear Krisna,
ReplyDeleteyour goals are interesting especially the visiting South Korea part. I'd like to visit that country someday too. Also the motivational quote in Hangul makes your article different from the others'.
The paragraphs are well connected and easy to understand. I just want to give a suggestion to revise 'Do you ever write your ' to 'Have you ever written'.
Thanks, and hwaiting!^^
Hi Krisna! You have good atticle. I like this because you put the photo and it make more interesting. Maybe you should change "To achieve this goal after graduated I will find a good job and saving the money to buy the tickets." To "To achieve this goal after graduated, I will find a good job and saving the money to buy the tickets "
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