teenager's music genres
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Paragraph 1 : What are their favourite genre ?
paragraph 2 : 75% of them said POP.
paragraph 3 : About 20% of them choosed EDM.
paragraph 4 : 5% choosed alternative rock
Music comes in many different types and styles from alternative , pop, hip hop ,EDM, etc. Many genres have a rich history or geograpichal significance, a cult following or music roots that go far beyond the 20th century. And then how about the teenagers ? What are their favorite genre ? to find out, i conducted a survey. I asked each of my friends what he or she favorites genre. After that, i realized that there are three answers : Pop, Alternative, and EDM.
The genre with the most answers is POP . 75% of them said POP. When i asked them about their favorite genre, almost all of them said POP. They said POP song is fun and energic. The other voter of this option said POP song also give us spirit to do something.
About 20% of them choosed EDM .
EDM is often used in the context of a live mix, where a DJ creates a seamless selection of tracks by segueing from one recording to the next. They said the intonation of EDM is interesting and hard to make it. And the other hand, EDM can make our good mood.
And about 5% choosed alternative rock. I asked them, why do they like music with noisy sound? and they said, because Rock is moved by inspiration and improvisation.
A good rock and roll band is made up of a number of talented individuals and together they combine their talents to make something great that has further depths to appreciate. And the other hand, she said she have enjoyed it since she was a kid.
In conclusion, most of my friends choosed music POP because Music POP is fun, while the other most common choise is EDM because it interesting, And the rest of them choosed alternative rock because rock is moved by inspiration.
EDM is often used in the context of a live mix, where a DJ creates a seamless selection of tracks by segueing from one recording to the next. They said the intonation of EDM is interesting and hard to make it. And the other hand, EDM can make our good mood.
And about 5% choosed alternative rock. I asked them, why do they like music with noisy sound? and they said, because Rock is moved by inspiration and improvisation.
A good rock and roll band is made up of a number of talented individuals and together they combine their talents to make something great that has further depths to appreciate. And the other hand, she said she have enjoyed it since she was a kid.
In conclusion, most of my friends choosed music POP because Music POP is fun, while the other most common choise is EDM because it interesting, And the rest of them choosed alternative rock because rock is moved by inspiration.
Hi krisna
ReplyDeleteThat's good article that you had written there. I think you should change "POP song also give us spirit to do something" become "POP song also gives us spirit to do something". By the way, I'm really enjoy to read your article krisna. Keep writing ya and have a nice day :)
Hi Khrisna. I like your article. Keep writing
ReplyDeleteWhat an interesting topic you have! It is always fun to read an article about teenagers. I like your writing style, hope you can keep improving.
ReplyDeleteI have some suggestions here. I think you should revise 'geograpichal' to 'geographical'.
Also, ' asked each of my friends what he or she favorites genre. ' to 'asked each of my friends about his or her favorite genre'
Thank you!
Hi Krisna
ReplyDeleteI want give you some suggestion, it would be better if you change the word "choosed" to be "chose" and please check the capitalization "I" on paragraph 1. but for all is good. Keep it up.... Krisna
Thank You.
wow your writing is very informative :)
ReplyDeleteyou are so cool in writing ;)
But according to me
it will be better if you change "And the other hand, EDM can make our good mood" become
" in addition, EDM can make our mood to be better"
the rest is very nice (y)
Good job ;)
No more correction from me as all of the mistakes already mentioned by our friends. But maybe you can justify all of the paragraphs instead of align it to the center (just to make it more prettier). Keep writing and improving Krisna.
ReplyDeleteHi krisna! Im sorry to say,if your paragraph have a error in this sentence " she said she have enjoyed it since she was a kid" i think that should be " she was said " but your writing is good. keep it up yaa :)
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