About Indonesia
Write! Plan your paragraph about the life of an important person or inventor in your country's history .
a. What is your main topic? Write it here.
I Gusti Ngurah Rai
b. What are your subtopics? Write them on the line below.
* In the Japanese occupation, Ngurah Rai had become an ally in the region of Bali and Lombok.
* Together with Ciung Wanara, the small army of Ngurah Rai, on 18 November 1946 attacked Tabanan which produced a Dutch datasemen with complete weapon surrender.
Born in Badung, January 30, 1917, I Gusti Ngurah Rai was the son of a sub-district head of Petang, I Gusti Ngurah Palung. Interested in the military world since childhood, Ngurah Rai joined HIS Denpasar and then continue with MULO in Malang. Not enough to get there, he then joined the school of military cadres, Prayodha Bali, Gianyar. In
1940, Ngurah Rai was inaugurated as Lieutenant II who then continued
his education at the Corps Opleiding Voor Reserve Officieren (CORO),
Magelang and Artillery Education, Malang.
Write! Plan your paragraph about an important building or monument in your country.
a. What is your main topic? Write it here.
Monument National Taman Pujaan Bangsa Margarana
b. What are your subtopics? Write them on the line below.
* In the area of our Monument was uprooted by a long row of names of heroes who died 62 years ago when the Ciung Wanara troops commanded by Let. Kol I Gusti Ngurah Rai
National Monument Taman Pujaan Bangsa Margarana is located in the village of Marga. Marga Sub-district, Tabanan District, Bali is approximately 25 km from Denpasar City to the northwest. In front of this historical event occurred "Puputan Margarana". In
the area of our Monument was uprooted by a long row of names of
heroes who died 62 years ago when the Ciung Wanara troops commanded by
Let.Kol I Gusti Ngurah Rai who fought all-out (bellows), when it's life
is not something valuable when compared with a sense of nationalism retained Indonesia's independence. Then
our journey continues into the area of the monument, visible monument
Hero from a distance, in addition to east and west there are 2 long
bale wide enough. The expanse of verdant grass and wide in front of the monument often in the designation as a place of flag ceremony. Quite
simply the monument's architectural form, essentially in the form of a
pentagon and inscribed on each angle containing the images of the
precepts in Pancasila, this gives the meaning that the struggle is based
on the 5 values underlying the establishment of the Republic of
Indonesia. On
the monument there is also a letter of rejection of the Dutch
occupation of Bali, each of which in kilogram to 4 and placed on the
side of the monument. The larger headstone of the other headstone and also in garnished over the others is the Letter headstone. Kol I Gusti Ngurah Rai. Among the rows of heroes are also from outside Bali and some even from Japan.
Write! Plan your paragraph about an important important day,year,decade in your country's history
a. What is your main topic? Write it here.
National Children's Day
b. What are your subtopics? Write them on the line below.
*KPAI as an independent institution in charge of supervising the implementation of child protection efforts conducted by state institutions and investigating child rights violations committed by the state
National
Children's Day begins with the idea of the second president of
Indonesia (Soeharto), who sees children as an asset of the nation's
progress, so that since 1984 based on Presidential Decree No. 44 of
1984, set every July 23 as National Children's Day (HAN ). National Children Day activities are held from central to local level.Furthermore, to support these activities, established the Commission for the Protection of Indonesian Children (KPAI). KPAI
as an independent institution in charge of supervising the
implementation of child protection efforts conducted by state
institutions and investigating child rights violations committed by the
state. KPAI can also advise and enter directly to the President on
various efforts that need to be done related to the protection of
children especially Indonesian children.Then
to support the welfare of children and protect the rights of children
Actually by law and legislation, has many things done by the state. Among the government of the Republic of Indonesia as already promulgated Law no. 4 year 1979 about Child Welfare that contains various provisions on the problem of children in Indonesia. Presidential Instruction no. 2
year 1989 has been established on the Development of Child Welfare as
the legal foundation of the Decade of Indonesian Children 1 in 1986 -
1996 and the Decade of Children II in 1996 - 2006.
a. What is your main topic? Write it here.
I Gusti Ngurah Rai
b. What are your subtopics? Write them on the line below.
* In the Japanese occupation, Ngurah Rai had become an ally in the region of Bali and Lombok.
* Together with Ciung Wanara, the small army of Ngurah Rai, on 18 November 1946 attacked Tabanan which produced a Dutch datasemen with complete weapon surrender.
Born in Badung, January 30, 1917, I Gusti Ngurah Rai was the son of a sub-district head of Petang, I Gusti Ngurah Palung. Interested in the military world since childhood, Ngurah Rai joined HIS Denpasar and then continue with MULO in Malang. Not enough to get there, he then joined the school of military cadres, Prayodha Bali, Gianyar. In
1940, Ngurah Rai was inaugurated as Lieutenant II who then continued
his education at the Corps Opleiding Voor Reserve Officieren (CORO),
Magelang and Artillery Education, Malang.
In the Japanese occupation, Ngurah Rai had become an ally in the region of Bali and Lombok. After
the news of Indonesian independence in 1945 finally arrived in Bali,
BKR renamed the People's Security Army (TKR) Sunda Kecil where he as
commander. As the commander of TKR Sunda Kecil, Ngurah Rai
felt the need to consolidate with the leadership of the central TKR
where it was headquartered in Jogjakarta. Arriving in Jogjakarta, Ngurah Rai was appointed commander of the Little Sunda Regiment with the rank of Lieutenant Colonel.Together
with Ciung Wanara, the small army of Ngurah Rai, on 18 November 1946
attacked Tabanan which produced a Dutch datasemen with complete weapon
surrender. This prompted the Dutch to avenge the fiercest
battles and exert their strengths throughout the islands of Bali and
Lombok to avenge the deeds of Ngurah Rai. In the
battle, defense for defense that formed Ngurah Rai destroyed until the
last defense of Ciung Wanara, the village of Margarana, Ngurah Rai and
his troops successfully repelled because the whole fell into a deep
ravine. The war was finally known as Puputan
Margarana war because before the fall Ngurah Rai had shouted the word
bellows which means an all-out war. The incident occurred on November 20, 1946.Because of his efforts, Ngurah Rai earned the Mahaputra Star title and promotion to Brigadier TNI (posthumous). Not only that, he also earned the title of National Hero based on Presidential Decree RI no 63 / TK / 1975 dated August 9, 1975.
a. What is your main topic? Write it here.
Monument National Taman Pujaan Bangsa Margarana
b. What are your subtopics? Write them on the line below.
* In the area of our Monument was uprooted by a long row of names of heroes who died 62 years ago when the Ciung Wanara troops commanded by Let. Kol I Gusti Ngurah Rai
National Monument Taman Pujaan Bangsa Margarana is located in the village of Marga. Marga Sub-district, Tabanan District, Bali is approximately 25 km from Denpasar City to the northwest. In front of this historical event occurred "Puputan Margarana". In
the area of our Monument was uprooted by a long row of names of
heroes who died 62 years ago when the Ciung Wanara troops commanded by
Let.Kol I Gusti Ngurah Rai who fought all-out (bellows), when it's life
is not something valuable when compared with a sense of nationalism retained Indonesia's independence. Then
our journey continues into the area of the monument, visible monument
Hero from a distance, in addition to east and west there are 2 long
bale wide enough. The expanse of verdant grass and wide in front of the monument often in the designation as a place of flag ceremony. Quite
simply the monument's architectural form, essentially in the form of a
pentagon and inscribed on each angle containing the images of the
precepts in Pancasila, this gives the meaning that the struggle is based
on the 5 values underlying the establishment of the Republic of
Indonesia. On
the monument there is also a letter of rejection of the Dutch
occupation of Bali, each of which in kilogram to 4 and placed on the
side of the monument. The larger headstone of the other headstone and also in garnished over the others is the Letter headstone. Kol I Gusti Ngurah Rai. Among the rows of heroes are also from outside Bali and some even from Japan. a. What is your main topic? Write it here.
National Children's Day
b. What are your subtopics? Write them on the line below.
*KPAI as an independent institution in charge of supervising the implementation of child protection efforts conducted by state institutions and investigating child rights violations committed by the state
National
Children's Day begins with the idea of the second president of
Indonesia (Soeharto), who sees children as an asset of the nation's
progress, so that since 1984 based on Presidential Decree No. 44 of
1984, set every July 23 as National Children's Day (HAN ). National Children Day activities are held from central to local level.Furthermore, to support these activities, established the Commission for the Protection of Indonesian Children (KPAI). KPAI
as an independent institution in charge of supervising the
implementation of child protection efforts conducted by state
institutions and investigating child rights violations committed by the
state. KPAI can also advise and enter directly to the President on
various efforts that need to be done related to the protection of
children especially Indonesian children.Then
to support the welfare of children and protect the rights of children
Actually by law and legislation, has many things done by the state. Among the government of the Republic of Indonesia as already promulgated Law no. 4 year 1979 about Child Welfare that contains various provisions on the problem of children in Indonesia. Presidential Instruction no. 2
year 1989 has been established on the Development of Child Welfare as
the legal foundation of the Decade of Indonesian Children 1 in 1986 -
1996 and the Decade of Children II in 1996 - 2006.
I found the pargraphs to be well-structured. But I think you might want to add a conclusion sentence to your paragraph. Good job, keep it up.
ReplyDeleteHello Krisna, Glad to see your paragraph I found that your paragraph was well-structured. i like your way to described your idea. Form my suggestion is in First paragraph in this sentences "In the battle, defense for defense that formed Ngurah Rai destroyed until the last defense of Ciung Wanara, the village of Margarana," become "In the battle, a defense by the defense formed Ngurah Rai destroyed until the last defense of Ciung Wanara, the village of Margarana,"
ReplyDeleteThank you and keep it up
ReplyDeleteHi krisna your article is so interesting to read and for sure you really did a great job. My suggestion for you is I think it's better for you to add an important word if you want to make a concluding sentences for example like overall, in short and so on. All in all, I really like your paragraph because your main idea and the subtopic are so clear enough. Good job and keep it up :)
hello, krisna, I really like reading ur paragraph, it is very interesting and from them, i can learn a lot. but, i think if u put the conclusion sentences in the first paragraph is better. thank u.
ReplyDeleteHai Krisna, Your wiriting is good. It is interesting to read. But I found out a little error in National Children's paragraph . "KPAI as an independent institution in charge of supervising the implementation of child protection efforts conducted by state institutions and investigating child rights violations committed by the state" I think you should add a word like "that" or "which" between that sentence so people can understand what you mean
ReplyDeleteLike this: "KPAI as an independent ""that"" institution in charge of supervising the implementation of child protection efforts conducted by state institutions and investigating child rights violations committed by the state"
Goodluck Kris!
Hello,Krisna. It is a good and interesting article. Narrative ,Descriptive,Expository is very clearly.
ReplyDeleteEach paragraph's topic and subtopic also clear. Through your article ,I know a lot about Indonesia history. For your paragraph, I have a suggestion : For the first topic ,I think you should talk too much about the I Gusti Ngurah Rai 's experience , It means give us more informations. Thank you.
Hi Krisna Thats a good paragraph. You already write your main topic And sub topic before you started your paragraph also. But I think you should change word “taman” become “park” because foreign Will need to translate first before read your post. Thank you.
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