The things that i like to do


Write!1. Plan your paragraph about the things you like to do.
a. What is your main topic? Write it here.
    The three things I like to do during my free time in my new room.
b. What are your subtopics? Write them on the line below.
- Listening to music
- Watch Thai drama or variety show and reality show
- Learn korean language 

      Actually there are so many things that i like to do in my room. But i chose the most thing i do . First, maybe this is very ordinary thing, but for me this is a must. i have to listen some musics to get rid my stress, at least 3 songs and the song is Korean song. I don’t know why i like Korean song the most even though i don’t really understand. I have my favourite Korean group and i listen their songs 3 times a day. And i listen to music while making this story. 




      And the second one is watching Thai drama, variety show and reality show. I do this thing when i have free time. I spend my spare time to watch drama and variety show. For the Thai drama, the last Thai drama i watched was Side by Side. This drama tells about a badminton athlete.  They are brothers and one of them has special flaws. This is great drama, you must watch it ! because i was crying while watching it. And then variety shows, i have one of my favorite shows. The name of the show is 2Days 1Night. This show introduces us about how beautiful Korea is. Not only that, the artist was really funny like Jong Min Kim, he’s been 10 years in this show. I like it very much . They update every Saturday. 





     


    Last but not least, learn Korean language. I can learn Korean language from Korean songs, drama and their shows. but i also learn from the internet, i download the PDF and study from that. Korean language is very complicated, same as English but more difficult. But not as hard as Mandarin. The first thing i learned is how to write it, Korean alphabet is easy compare to with Mandarin and Thailand. Then i learned how to pronounce it. Because i often listen to Korean songs, this is not too difficult hahahaha.  In this globalization learning more than 1 language is very important. Therefore, i want to improve my language skills.


So that are the things i do in my free time. How about yours ?

Comments

  1. ByoSeptember 8, 2017 at 1:30 AM

    Hi, Krisna. Great paragraph. I can see that you underline your topic sentence, the three subtopics and also the conclusion sentence. It helps me in finding those. Your sub topic also help to explain your topic sentence, as well as your supporting sentence help me in understanding your sub topics.

    I think there's a grammar error in your conclusion sentence, which supposed to be 'those'. You wrote a great paragraph. keep it up :)

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  2. UnknownSeptember 8, 2017 at 2:39 AM

    whoaaa "what you like to do' are really similar with what I like to do krisnaaaaa eonnie ekekekekeke
    but your Korean skill must be much better then me :)

    I like your paragraph simple, to the point and tidy.
    but don't forget Krisna to change " I" to be in capital "I"

    keep it up

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  3. UnknownSeptember 8, 2017 at 4:50 AM

    Hi Krisna,
    Is it a great right? can see your article. Overall your writing skills in this article it's quite good, maybe in the next article, you're supposed to make better than this.

    thank you :)

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  4. UnknownSeptember 8, 2017 at 5:31 AM

    Hi Krisna,
    Happy to see your article again. From Your article I can see that your article is already structure well. I can easily understand your main topic sentences also the relation between Major and a minor of supporting sentence.

    I thinks you need capital "i" so it would become "I" and for the last paragraph there is sentences "but i also learn from the internet". would be better if you add "it" so it become "but i also learn it from the internet" That's all for me.

    Thank You ^_^

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  5. UnknownSeptember 9, 2017 at 12:24 AM

    Hello there Krisna. I really enjoy your post. But i think that i found little grammar and typing errors from the first paragraph. all " I" words should be in capital. i found out that some of your "I" words still not in capital. For example for the 1st and the second sentences om paragraph 1 :
    " Actually there are so many things that 'i' like to do in my room. But 'i' chose the most thing 'i' do ."
    And also don't forget that after "." mark the next first words should be in Capital:
    "First, maybe this is very ordinary thing, but for me this is a must. 'i'have to listen some musics to get rid my stress".
    Thank you kris.

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  6. UnknownSeptember 9, 2017 at 9:17 AM

    Hi Krisna,
    Your blog is basically meet the requirements of the assignment, have enough topic sentences and subtopics, good grammar and very clear. Make the reader easy to read and understand.

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  7. UnknownSeptember 10, 2017 at 4:28 AM

    Hi Krisna
    Basically you did a great job, you even put the poster of your favorite song and highlight the key words of each paragraph
    Keep up the good work

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  8. Krisna JuniyantiSeptember 10, 2017 at 10:14 PM

    REVISION:

    Actually there are so many things that I like to do in my room. But I chose the most thing I do . First, maybe this is very ordinary thing, but for me this is a must. I have to listen some musics to get rid my stress, at least 3 songs and the song is Korean song. I don’t know why I like Korean song the most even though I don’t really understand. I have my favorite Korean group and I listen their songs 3 times a day. And I listen to music while making this story.

    And the second one is watching Thai drama, variety show and reality show. I do this thing when I have free time. I spend my spare time to watch drama and variety show. For the Thai drama, the last Thai drama I watched was Side by Side. This drama tells about a badminton athlete. They are brothers and one of them has special flaws. This is great drama, you must watch it ! because I was crying while watching it. And then variety shows, I have one of my favorite shows. The name of the show is 2Days 1Night. This show introduces us about how beautiful Korea is. Not only that, the artist was really funny like Jong Min Kim, he’s been 10 years in this show. I like it very much . They update every Saturday.

    Last but not least, learn Korean language. I can learn Korean language from Korean songs, drama and their shows. but I also learn it from the internet, I download the PDF and study from that. Korean language is very complicated, same as English but more difficult. But not as hard as Mandarin. The first thing I learned is how to write it, Korean alphabet is easy compare to with Mandarin and Thailand. Then I learned how to pronounce it. Because I often listen to Korean songs, this is not too difficult hahahaha. In this globalization learning more than 1 language is very important. Therefore, I want to improve my language skills.


    So those are the things i do in my free time. How about yours ?

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